英语习作欣赏(二) 
    经过近一个月的训练,外国语学校2016届高中直升班在英语学习方面取得了巨大的进步。《外国语学生英语习作欣赏》栏目将连续刊登他们平时的习作,供广大读者欣赏,同时激励这些优秀的苗子进一步茁壮成长。


My English
刘沂(高中直升2班)

    I made friends with her seven years ago and she has been my best friend ever since. I always talk with her about my worries and joys, study together with her and plan for my future with her. Her name is English and she belongs to me. When I was only nine years of age, I found that she was different from others. She is quiet and peaceful. She knows a lot, which is why I love and respect her. 

    But there was a time when our relationship became difficult because she was so hard to learn. I couldn’t read and understand her easily and correctly. As a result, I became very sad and helpless. No matter how hard I tried, I found it very hard to learn. Just as I was going to give her up, I got a book, Red and Black, which made me so interested in it with its story that I finally became determined to learn English well. She has again become my best friend.
    I’ll never leave her because I’m sure she can serve me well in the future if I can learn her well. I’ll make full use of her to serve my country well in the future.

Teacher’s comments:

    The writer compares English to her best friend. The process of learning English is the process of establishing a friendly relationship with the target language. Only with interest and love is it possible for a student to learn English well, as interest is the mother of knowledge and knowledge is the mother of success. When students find English hard to separate from them, they are already successful in learning English. 

Wu Rongming (吴荣铭)




My birthday celebration
胡佳辉(高中直升2班)

    I was born on the morning of December 18, 2000, so that day has become a most important day in my life. When my birthday comes each year, all the family members and close relatives will get together to celebrate it for me. It’s always the best time of year in my mind.

    As usual, my mother starts to cook in the afternoon. She pays great attention to cooking a lot of dishes I like. At about 6 p.m., our relatives will come one after another. I feel excited time and again when I open the door to welcome them because they usually bring me all kinds of presents. Once my uncle dressed himself like Santa Claus and gave me a large cake because I was born near Christmas Day. What a big pleasant surprise it was!
    Later, we start to eat dinner, but I always pay no attention to those delicious dishes, as I’m always expecting the next part. Sure enough, the time comes when someone will turn off the lights, light the candles on the cake and ask me to make three wishes. After I’ve done that, I’ll blow off the candles. At that time, those who attend the party will sing the song Happy Birthday to You to me. My father will say a few words to encourage me to behave better and work harder at my lessons. After that, I’ll try to cut the cake and hand the pieces to everyone present. What a good time it is!

    I love birthday celebrations because I can enjoy the atmosphere and taste delicious dishes, but I also “hate” the birthday, because it means I’m one year older and that I will have more responsibilities. Really we can’t stop the steps of our growth, but we can hold birthday celebrations to member the course of growing up.


Teacher’s comments:
    Different from others, Hu Jiahui keeps the record of his birthday celebrations in general, which is also a good approach in writing. He first of all tells us the general impression of his birthday celebrations in the first paragraph, and then goes on in the next two paragraphs to describe the contents of the events and finally writes about his feeling about his growing up in the last paragraph. Therefore, the article is very well structured. 

Wu Rongming (吴荣铭)